My Best Writing

As I walk along the walk way I feel the cold autumn breeze on my face and arm and legs.All the leafs that used to be Green are now brown, orange, red and yellow.All the leafs are slowly swaying swishing down to the ground. As I walk, I feel as if I was walking through a big arch with lots of leafs falling to the ground. The trees are slowly swishing from one side to another as I stop walking I lie down on a leaf bed. A big gust of wind sunddley blows all the leafs of making a top layer of fresh leafs on me.

My Sock puppet play

The computer shutdown
By Kate Waterland

Emily(Shy, quite)
Tanzey( nice,loving,sweet)
Gregg (grouchy)
Sally( A superhero )

Scene: Everyone is in the classroom apart form Sally and Tanzey.Typing away on the computers
Emily: (saying quietly) I'm bored lets go outside
Gregg:(saying quite mean) OK but whats in it for me?
(Tanzey walks in)
Tanzey: Hey!What are you guys doing?
Emily:We're going outside!
Tanzey: Cool! Came I come?
Gregg: NO!!!!
Emily: Don't mind him
( They walk out, When they are out the computers turn off)
BOOM!!!!!
Tanzey:(looking surprised) WOW! What was that?
Emily: I don't know! I think all the computers just turned of? do you want to go and see?
(they walk in)
(At that moment Sally flies in)
Sally: Da da da da da daa!
Gregg: who are you and GET OUT!
Emily: Don't mind him
Sally: I'm SALLY and I'm a superhero!(say with arm raised)
Tanzey:WOW! A real superhero!
Emily:Well, 'cause you're a superhero can you can you help us
Gregg: Why would we want her to help us? I mean she's a superhero I'm sure she wouldn't want to a couple of girls?
Emily,Tanzey :(crying) Gregg-g-g-g-g-g-g-g-*sniff* don't be so mean
Sally: OK I'll help
Emily: Cool
Sally: What happened?
Tanzey: The computer's turned off!!
Sally: Well, how about you flick the power switch on?
Emily: Ok!
Tanzey: I'll go over and turn it on.
Emily: Yay, all the computer's just turned on.
Tanzey: Thanks, Sally.

THE END.

My description writing.

11.5.10 W.A.L.T: describe - with voice
Mrs walker and jump jam, they go together like peanut butter and jelly, because Mrs Walker is so bouncy like jelly and jump jam well jam and peanut butter! Mrs Walker is so bouncy like a big blue ball bouncing around on the stage.She is energetic like a fizzy drink bottle that was just shaken. Shae is always so happy like a tiger that had just caught its prey.Mrs Walker has THE longest finger nails EVER they could cut a loaf of bread!She's so funny like a frighted frazzled frog. She has mussels for Australia. She loves her job likes it the best necklace in the world! She always wants energy back because she gives so much to us. She is always funny like the funniest comedian in the world. Not to sound too down but she has the sharpest voice like the meanest most maddest teacher in the world! When she teaches jump jam she looks hold on does enjoy it! I think I covered everything.well there you have it Mrs Walker.

S.A
WHAT did I learn?
I learn't that you can't have a smile after a smile because you will over do it.
WHAT did I do well?
I think that I did the description about Mrs Walker very well
WHAT is my next learning step?
My next learning step is to not have too many smiles in my writing.

My water story.

5.5.10 W.A.L.T: create a picture with our words.
One day the twins...
What? Who are the twins!
Well let me tell you, their names are Benk and Menk.
Any way, while the twins and I were out on the boat (that Menk owned and was driving) knee boarding we decided to stop at my favorite island Plink Plok... The day was September the 1st 1990 and it was a beautiful day...
What? where were we!
Oops didn't I tell you
We were at the bay of islands.
Oh that makes sense
OK back to my story, It was a beautiful day and we were having a lovey time knee boarding then sundley * SPLASH * Benk had fallen off. " YA my turn" I yelled jumping around the boat. We pulled Benk in and turned around then started heading back to shore. I strapped in to the knee board and with a big BANG the bright blue big boat was off " WEEEE" I was going so fast I felt like I was flying. After hours and hours of fun the twins and I went back to our shack at Plink Plop and plonked down on our beds and fell asleep

WOW that was a good story I really liked the part where Benk fell off the knee board.

My self assessment for my P.I

Expert
 Shows weeks of work
 Audience is very interested
 I've done the work myself
 Research in my words – with my personality in it
 Contains humour(?)
 Interaction with the audience
 Speech is confident, clear and with action and expression

Practititioner
 Shows three or four weeks of work
 Contains pictures and steps
 Information is interesting and in my own words
 Adults have supported me without doing work for me
 Some humour
 Some interaction
 Audience is attentive
 Speech is clear

Apprentice
 Shows about a week’s work
 A little information – some in my own words
 Adults have done some of it for me
 No interaction with the audience
 No humour
 Poor presentation
 Few pictures

Novice
 Clearly started at the last minute
 Hardly any info
 Parents have done a lot of it for me
 No pictures or steps
 Copied straight off the internet
 No humour
 Not finished on time
 Untidy presentation
 Speech is not very clear

My writing

This is My Writing.

What I did well:

I think that I chose the topic very well.

What did I learn:

I learnt that my people in the story need to have something unusual about them so the reader has something to hole on to.

What will I do better next time:

I think that I will make the people more interesting

My interview sheet.

This is my Interview sheet.
I think I did very well at putting this together.

Handwriting

This is My Handwriting.
What I learned.
I learned that You have to fill in the whole page with colour.
What I will do better next time
Next time I will make sure that the border relates to the poem.